There are many things I like about this cover letter example for a Human Resources job. I also have some thoughts about how to make it better. Take a look at the letter that Liz wrote, then see my version, which has a few changes.
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Liz's First Cover Letter for a Human Resources Job
I am a young lady with a Bachelor degree of Commerce (B.Com – Human Resources) at the University of ** having graduated last spring. I am applying for the position of HR Administrator/Payroll Accountant. Currently I am working with ** as an Assistant Human Resources Officer.Taking initiatives has always been my academic and career focus. I certainly understand responsibility, hold an intense work ethic, possess social skills that can build and maintain relations across and beyond the organization and strive to do my best in any situation to meet corporate objectives.I believe my strength, abilities and skills make me a perfect fit for this job. I am extremely reliable, considerate, personable, and I am comfortable working with all personality types.Thank you for taking the time to review my credentials. I would welcome the opportunity to discuss how my education, practical skills, and background qualify me to be a member of your company.
Please give me a call at 555-555-5555 and/or email me at XX.
My Thoughts About Liz's Sample Cover Letter
What I like best about Liz's cover letter is that it's short and has a natural flow. I feel like I sort of know her after reading it. That’s really nice!
Without going into a lot of detail, here are a few things that I think would improve this cover letter.
- The opening sentence needs a little help. “I am a young lady” sounds old-fashioned and out of place here. I suggest deleting that phrase and reworking the sentence to make a smoother entrance to the rest of the letter.
- The second paragraph has good stuff in it. I think it would be great to break it into bullet points with a short intro sentence at the beginning.
- Don't say that you’re a "perfect fit" for the job. Let them decide that. You could say you’re an "excellent candidate" for the job. It’s a little more humble, yet still confident (in my way of thinking).
Here's what Liz's letter might look like with these suggestions implemented.
Improved Version of Liz's Cover Letter
Having recently earned my Bachelor degree of Commerce (B.Com – Human Resources) at the University of **, I would like to apply for the position of HR Administrator/Payroll Accountant at your firm. Currently I am working with ** as an Assistant Human Resources Officer.Taking initiative has always been my academic and career strength, along with:
- Understanding responsibility.
- Holding an intense work ethic.
- Possessing social skills that build and maintain relations across and beyond the organization.
- Striving to do my best in any situation to meet corporate objectives.
I believe my strengths, abilities and skills make me an excellent candidate for this job. I am extremely reliable, considerate, personable, and I am comfortable working with all personality types.
Thank you for taking the time to review my credentials. I would welcome the opportunity to discuss how my education, practical skills, and background qualify me to be a member of your company.
Please give me a call at 555-555-5555 and/or email me at XX.
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Cover Letter Samples for Business and Administration
When you're applying for administrative and business jobs, one of your most important qualifications will be your communication skills. The first time they will be evaluated is when the hiring manager reviews your cover letter and resume. It's important to make a good first impression, in order to increase your chances of landing an interview (and eventually, the job).
Before you start writing a cover letter, take a look at administration and business cover letter examples to get an idea of how to construct a professional and effective letter that is going to sell your credentials to the hiring manager.
What to Include in the Letter
Before you start writing your cover letter, review the job posting. You'll find a list of the job qualifications that the employer is looking for. Use your cover letter to show the hiring manager that you meet those requirements.
Match your qualifications to the job listing by analyzing the ad and making a list of keywords related to the skills and experience sought by the hiring manager. You can also include the general administrative and business skills that employers seek in the candidates they evaluate for employment opportunities, as well as any hard or soft skills related to the role but not specifically included in the ad.
Work these keywords into your cover letter and resume, to ensure that your application materials make it through the applicant tracking system and get to a real person with the ability to call you for an interview.
The letter should include the following:
- Subject Line, with your name and the job (if you’re sending your cover letter via email)
- Contact Information (top of letter for printed letter, below signature for email cover letter)
- Professional Greeting
- Paragraph 1: A brief introduction and why you are writing
- Paragraphs 2 and 3: Your qualifications for the job for which you're applying
- Closing Paragraph: Appreciation for being considered for the job, and how you will follow-up if you have a contact person
- Professional Closing
If you're not sure what to write, review these tips for how to write a cover letter before you get started, and a list of what to include in a cover letter.
Cover Letter Examples for Administration / Business Jobs
Review cover letter examples and then write a personalized letter that explains how your skills relate to the criteria listed in the job posting.
It's important that your letters are customized for each job you apply for, highlighting your relevant experience.
Sample Cover Letter - Business / Administration
Your City, State, ZIP Code
Your Phone Number
Your Cell Phone Number
Dear Hiring Manager,
I was excited to read about the Administrative Assistant job opening at XYZ company. I have several years of experience in a variety of fields including insurance and finance.
In addition to my extensive office experience, I have strong communication, customer service, and administrative skills. My broad background makes me an excellent candidate for this position.
Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you to arrange an interview.
Your Signature (hard copy letter)
Your Typed Name
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Cover Letter Templates and Formats
Starting your cover letter from scratch? It’s often easier to start from a template. Staring down that blank page has the effect of making even the most accomplished job seeker momentarily forget all their qualifications and achievements.
These templates can offer a good starting point for your cover letter. Be sure to personalize your cover letters each and every time you apply for a job. It’s essential that your cover letter be targeted to the role you’re applying for; generic cover letters won’t show the hiring manager that you’re serious and enthusiastic about the role.
Again, these templates are just a starting place for your resume, which should be personalized to reflect your unique skillset, and targeted to the job for which you’re applying.
Administration / Business Resume Examples
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