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A Friend In Need Is A Friend Indeed Long Essay Rubric

The Writing section can be the most daunting section of the TOEFL. You’ll have 50 minutes to write two complete essays that must meet multiple requirements and show a strong grasp of English. Knowing what graders are looking for and reviewing TOEFL Writing samples can go a long way towards helping you get a high score on this section.

This guide will go over both of the TOEFL Writing tasks, explain how they’re graded, go over a high-scoring TOEFL Writing sample for each essay type, and end with TOEFL Writing examples for you to analyze.

 

The TOEFL Writing Section

The TOEFL Writing section is 50 minutes long (broken into two parts) and contains two tasks: Integrated Writing and Independent Writing. It’s the fourth and final section of the exam. You’ll type both essays on the computer. The next two sections will explain the format and requirements of each of the writing tasks as well as how they will be scored.

 

TOEFL Integrated Writing Task

The Integrated Writing task requires you to use listening, reading, and writing skills. For this task, you’ll have three minutes to read a short passage, then you’ll listen to a short (approximately two-minute long) audio clip of a speaker discussing the same topic the written passage covers.

You’ll have 20 minutes to plan and write a response that references both of these sources in order to answer the question. You won’t discuss your own opinion. During the writing time, you’ll be able to look at the written passage again, but you won’t be able to re-hear the audio clip. You’ll be able to take notes while you listen to it though. The suggested response length for this task is 150-225 words.

 

For this essay, you’ll be graded on the quality of your writing as well as how well your response represents the main points of the audio clip and written passage and how they relate to each other. Each essay receives a score from 0-5. For both essay types, you can check out the complete rubric used for official grading. Below are key points from the Integrated Writing rubric. (You can view complete rubric for both essays here.)

ScoreRubric Notes
5
  • Successfully selects the important information from the lecture.
  • Coherently and accurately presents information from both the lecture and the reading.
  • Well organized with few language errors.
4
  • Generally good in selecting the important information from the lecture and reading.
  • May have minor omission, inaccuracy, vagueness, or imprecision of some content.
  • More frequent or noticeable minor language errors.
3
  • It conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise information about the lecture and reading.
  • Key points may be missing.
  • Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent and obscure meanings.
2
  • Contains some relevant information from the lecture, but is marked by significant language difficulties or by significant omission or inaccuracy of important ideas.
1
  • Provides little or no meaningful or relevant coherent content from the lecture.
  • The language level of the response is so low that it is difficult to derive meaning.
0
  • Merely copies sentences from the reading, rejects the topic or is not connected to the topic, is written in a foreign language,or is blank.

 

 

TOEFL Independent Writing Task

For the Independent Writing task, you’ll have receive a question on a particular topic or issue. You’ll have 30 minutes to plan and write a response to that topic that explains your opinion on it. You’ll need to give reasons that support your decision. It’s recommended that your response to this task be at least 300 words.

You’ll be graded on how well you develop your ideas, how well your essay is organized, and how accurately you use English to express your ideas.

ScoreRubric Notes
5
  • Effectively addresses the topic and task.
  • Is well organized and developed.
  • Displays strong and consistent language skills with minimal errors.
4
  • Addresses the topic and task well, though some points may not be fully elaborated.
  • Is generally well organized and well developed.
  • Occasional noticeable minor errors in structure, word form, or use of idiomatic language that do not interfere with meaning.
3
  • Addresses the topic and task using somewhat developed explanations, exemplifications, and/or details.
  • May demonstrate inconsistent facility in sentence formation and word choice that may result in lack of clarity and occasionally obscure meaning.
2
  • Limited development in response to the topic and task.
  • Lack of details to support or illustrate generalizations in response to the task.
  • An accumulation of errors in sentence structure and/or usage.
1
  • Little or no detail, or irrelevant specifics, or questionable responsiveness to the task.
  • Serious and frequent errors in sentence structure or usage.
0
  • Merely copies sentences from the reading, rejects the topic or is not connected to the topic, is written in a foreign language,or is blank.

 

Top-Scoring TOEFL Integrated Writing Sample

Below is an official TOEFL Integrated Writing sample question and as well as an essay response that received a score of 5. It includes a written passage, the transcript of a conversation (which would be an audio recording on the actual TOEFL, and the essay prompt. After the prompt is an example of a top-scoring essay. You can read the essay in full, then read our comments on what exactly about this essay gives it a top score.

 

Integrated Writing Example Prompt

You have three minutes to read the following passage and take notes.In many organizations, perhaps the best way to approach certain new projects is to assemble a group of people into a team. Having a team of people attack a project offers several advantages. First of all, a group of people has a wider range of knowledge, expertise, and skills than any single individual is likely to possess. Also, because of the numbers of people involved and the greater resources they possess, a group can work more quickly in response to the task assigned to it and can come up with highly creative solutions to problems and issues. Sometimes these creative solutions come about because a group is more likely to make risky decisions that an individual might not undertake. This is because the group spreads responsibility for a decision to all the members and thus no single individual can be held accountable if the decision turns out to be wrong.

Taking part in a group process can be very rewarding for members of the team. Team members who have a voice in making a decision will no doubt feel better about carrying out the work that is entailed by that decision than they might doing work that is imposed on them by others. Also, the individual team member has a much better chance to “shine,” to get his or her contributions and ideas not only recognized but recognized as highly significant, because a team’s overall results can be more far-reaching and have greater impact than what might have otherwise been possible for the person to accomplish or contribute working alone.

 

Now listen to part of a lecture on the topic you just read about.

(Professor) Now I want to tell you about what one company found when it decided that it would turn over some of its new projects to teams of people, and make the team responsible for planning the projects and getting the work done. After about six months, the company took a look at how well the teams performed. On virtually every team, some members got almost a “free ride” … they didn’t contribute much at all, but if their team did a good job, they nevertheless benefited from the recognition the team got. And what about group members who worked especially well and who provided a lot of insight on problems and issues? Well…the recognition for a job well done went to the group as a whole, no names were named. So it won’t surprise you to learn that when the real contributors were asked how they felt about the group process, their attitude was just the opposite of what the reading predicts. Another finding was that some projects just didn’t move very quickly. Why? Because it took so long to reach consensus…it took many, many meetings to build the agreement among group members about how they would move the project along. On the other hand, there were other instances where one or two people managed to become very influential over what their group did. Sometimes when those influencers said “That will never work” about an idea the group was developing, the idea was quickly dropped instead of being further discussed. And then there was another occasion when a couple influencers convinced the group that a plan of theirs was “highly creative.” And even though some members tried to warn the rest of the group that the project was moving in directions that might not work, they were basically ignored by other group members. Can you guess the ending to *this* story? When the project failed, the blame was placed on all the members of the group.

 

Directions

You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.

Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on points made in the reading.

 

TOEFL Integrated Writing Sample Essay

The lecturer talks about research conducted by a firm that used the group system to handle their work. He says that the theory stated in the passage was very different and somewhat inaccurate when compared to what happened for real.

First, some members got free rides. That is, some didn’t work hard but gotrecognition for the success nontheless. This also indicates that people who worked hard was not given recognition they should have got. In other words, they weren’t given the oppotunity to “shine”. This derectly contradicts what the passage indicates.

Second, groups were slow in progress. The passage says that groups are nore responsive than individuals because of the number of people involved and their aggregated resources. However, the speaker talks about how the firm found out that groups were slower than individuals in dicision making. Groups needed more time for meetings, which are neccesary procceedures in decision making. This was another part where experience contradicted theory.

Third, influetial people might emerge, and lead the group towards glory or failure. If the influent people are going in the right direction there would be no problem. But in cases where they go in the wrong direction, there is nobody that has enough influence to counter the decision made. In other words, the group might turn into a dictatorship, with the influential party as the leader, and might be less flexible in thinking. They might become one-sided, and thus fail to succeed.

 

TOEFL Writing Sample Analysis

There are three key things this TOEFL example essay does that results in its high score:

  • Clearly presents main points
  • Contrasts lecture and reading points
  • Few grammatical/spelling errors

This essay clearly organizes the three main points made in the lecture, which is what the first part of the prompt asked for. (“Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard.”) There is one paragraph for each point, and the point is clearly stated within the first sentence of the paragraph followed by specific details from the lecture. This organization makes it easy to follow the writer’s thinking and see that they understood the lecture.

Additionally, the essay clearly contrasts points made in the lecture with points made in the reading. Each main paragraph includes an example of how the two are different, and the writer makes these differences clear by using words and phrases such as “however” and “this directly contradicts.” Stating these differences answers the second part of the prompt (“explain how they cast doubt on points made in the reading”) and shows that the writer understood both the lecture and reading well enough to differentiate between the two.

Finally, there are only a few minor spelling and grammar errors, the most noticeable of which is the incorrect use of the word “influent” in the final paragraph (it should be “influential”), and they do not detract from the meaning of the essay. This writer shows a strong grasp of the English language, a key TOEFL skill.

This essay shows that the writer understood the main points of both the lecture and the reading well enough to both describe them and contrast them. That, along with the relatively few mechanical errors, gives the essay a top score.

 

 

Top-Scoring Independent TOEFL Writing Sample

Below is an official Independent Writing prompt and top-scoring sample essay. Beneath the essay we analyze what about the essay resulted in it receiving a top score.

 

Independent Writing Example Prompt

DirectionsRead the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective essay will contain a minimum of 300 words.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

 

Independent TOEFL Writing Sample Essay

the traditional virtue of telling the truth in all situations is increasingly doubted by many in today’s world. many believe that telling the truth is not always the best policy when dealing with people. moreover, the line of a “truth” is becoming more and more vague. this essay will explore the importance of telling the truth in relationships between people.

we all understand that often the truth is offending and may not be a very nice thing to both hear or say. lies or white lies often have their advantages. the manipulation of white lies is the most obvious the business world. how many times have we heard that some product is “the finest” or “the cheapest”? how many times have we heard that products have such and such “magical functions”? advertising is about persuasion, and many would agree that if a company is to tell the absolute truth about it’s products, no one would be interested in even having a look at the products.

the same logic applies to human relationships. if your friend had worn a newly purchased dress on her birthday and energetically asked you if it was a worthy buy, would you freely express your opinion that you had never seen a dress as the one she’s currently wearing? and spoil her birthday? unarguably, hiding(entirely or particially) the truth in some situations can be quite handy indeed. confrontations and disputes can seemingly be avoided.

however, there is always the risk factor of the truth emerging sooner or later when telling an untruth. the basic trust in any relationships(businessman/customer, friends, parents/children) will be blotched, and would have an impact on the future relationship between both parties. the story of the “the boy who cried wolf” fully illustrates the consequenes of telling untruths. no one will believe you when you’re telling the truth. your word will have no weighting.

in addition, another “bad factor” of telling untruths is that you have absolutely no control over when the truth(of previous untruths) will emerge. untruths breed pain in both parties: tears when the truth is uncovered after a period of time; fear and the burden of sharing a “secret”. in the long run, it seems that hiding the truth is not beneficial to either party.
everyone hates betrayal. even if it is the trend to occasionally hide the truth in relationships, it is strongly recommended that not to follow that trend as the risk and the consequences of the truth unfolded overwhelms the minimal advantages one can derive from not telling the truth. afterall, it is understood that relationships are founded on “trust” which goes hand in hand with “truth”. indeed telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. always.

 

TOEFL Writing Sample Analysis

There are three key things this essay does that results in its high score, and each is explained in more detail below.

  • Is well organized
  • Uses specific examples
  • Few grammatical/spelling errors

The essay, like the first one, is well organized. The writer’s position is clear within the first few sentences, and the rest of the essay elaborates on that position. Each paragraph begins with a new major point that is then explained. This logical flow of ideas is easy for readers to follow and shows that the writer knows how to set up a clear argument.

Another reason the essay received a top score is because the writer used specific examples to make her point. By using specific examples, such as a friend buying a new outfit and asking your opinion and phrases businesses use to sell products, the writer makes her argument stronger and more concrete.

Finally, despite the lack of capitalization throughout the essay, there are few spelling and grammatical errors, and the ones that do exist don’t detract from the meaning of the essay or make it confusing to understand. This shows a strong command of English and the ability to write in-depth essays that are clear and get their point across.

 

 

Where to Find More TOEFL Writing Samples

Below are a list of other places, official and unofficial, where you can find TOEFL Writing examples. You can use these examples to get a better idea of what a high-scoring essay looks like and what graders are looking for on the Writing section.

 

Official Resources

Official resources are always the best to use since you can be sure the essay prompts are accurate and the sample essays were accurately scored.

 

TOEFL iBT Writing Sample Responses

This resource contains several sample essays (including the two sample responses used above). The essays from on this site received different scores as well as analysis of why they received the score they did. This can be helpful if you want more information on, say, what differentiates an essay that got a “5” from an essay that got a “4”.

 

TOEFL iBT Test Questions

This is a complete practice TOEFL, but it does include several sample essays along with score explanations so you can get a more in-depth look at how and why different essays received the scores they did.

 

Unofficial Resources

There are numerous unofficial TOEFL writing samples out there, of varying quality. Below are two of the best.

 

TOEFL Resources

This site has several dozen sample essays for both the Integrated and Independent Writing topics. There’s no scoring analysis, but you do get a good variety of essay topics and essay samples so that you can get a sense of how to approach different essay prompts.

 

Good Luck TOEFL

Good Luck TOEFL has seven sample Independent Writing essays (no Integrated Writing). There’s no scoring analysis, but the essays and prompts are similar to official TOEFL essay topics.

 

Review: Analyzing TOEFL Writing Examples

Writing can be a particularly tricky TOEFL section, and seeing TOEFL Writing samples can go a long way to helping you feel more confident. For TOEFL Writing, you’ll need to write two essays, the Integrated Writing Task and the Independent Writing Task. Looking over the rubrics for both these essays and understanding what graders will be looking for can help you understand what to include in your own essays.

Both essays are scored on a scale of 0-5. Top-scoring essays generally need to have good organization, specific examples, answer the prompt completely, and minor spelling and grammar errors. It can also be useful to review other TOEFL writing samples to get a better idea of what a great TOEFL essay looks like.

 

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A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed is a proverb that refers to the importance and value of true friends in life and reveals that: ‘a friend is a true friend only when he/she helps his/her friend in the need’.

Essay on A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed

A friend is of much importance for everyone especially in the bad times. Actually, we know the truth about a friend in our bad times when we really need them and their help. Good friends always help us and be with us in our all good or bad times however selfish and mean friends be with us only in our good times and they left us in bad times when we really need them.

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A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed Essay 1 (100 words)

A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed is a famous proverb which tells us about the true friends in life. True friends are those who really help us in our bad times of the life. They never left us alone, they motivate us and always support whenever we need them. True friends become very special in our life and remain with us. It is true friends who prove this proverb ‘A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed’. Good friends always support in our difficulties; for whom it is not necessary to be from same field, same class or same cast. True friends always listen to you and correct the mistakes you do to bring at right path. True friendship is a most trusted and important relationship among all relationships in the life.

A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed Essay 2 (150 words)

It is very necessary for us to distinguish between the bad and good friends to get prevented from being cheated and get benefited all through the life respectively. A friend who remain same in all conditions (good or bad) and support heartily, really become the true friend forever. A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed is a most famous old proverb which means that a friend who help us when we need him really become the true friend.

A true friend never see the differences (whether financial racial, cultural or traditional), he/she just become ready to help in any condition. A true friend always gives and never has feeling to take in return. Every one of us needs someone who can help us anytime whenever we need him/her. He/she not only helps us but exchanges good ideas, views and thoughts, sorrows, hopes, joys and other feelings. He/she never cheats and always cares for us. He/she never become arrogant and never changes on getting wealth and power.

A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed Essay 3 (200 words)

A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed is a famous proverb which tells us about the qualities of a true friend. True friends to anyone are God gifted and become precious gifts whole life. They have very special role in the life of their friends. Some cheater friends have decreased the level of faith in friendship however they can never spoil this true relationship. It is more valuable than other relationships in the life. Some people do not make friendship because of the fear of getting cheater friends as they cannot recognize them earlier. Generally, we say friend to all those whom we talk but true friend becomes different and very special.

Getting true friend is a blessing from God and every one of us don’t have such friends. True friendship becomes noble and great but very rare. Having a good friend is a most precious earning and most precious possessions of the life. Without having a true friend our life is dry and dull. True friends give good and safe company to us and make our life happy, interesting and worth living. He/she understands us and our all needs. They appreciate and motivate us in our bad circumstances and try to solve problems by sharing all the joys and misfortunes. They become very good counselor and guide in our life as well as the source of joy, strength and courage. They never left us in darkness even they become rich, prosperous and powerful. Thus, true friends always prove the proverb ‘a friend in need is a friend indeed’.


A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed Essay 4 (250 words)

The proverb, ‘A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed’, stands as a standard of the true relationship of friends. The meaning of this proverb is that a person who helps in our need or difficulty is a true friend. From childhood till the end of life, we come across various people with different qualities and behaviour. Some of them become common friends; some good friends and only few or only one becomes a true friend. Over a period of time some get away and some remain close to us who become true ones. Sometimes, we get confused and cannot be sure that whether someone is good or bad and she/she can be a true friend or just fair-weather friends.

Some greedy people develop terms with only influential people for getting benefit however it become their big mistake as this trick can never bless them with true friends. A true friendship can be test in the time of difficulties. Whereas, greedy friend gets disappear in the difficult times. They give many excuses of being at distance from us. A true friend always becomes close to his/her friend even in deep trouble and always concerned about the welfare of him. True friends always make every effort to help and keep their friends happy all time. We can see many examples of true friendships from ancient time till date such as friendship of Rama and Sugreva, Krishna and Kuchela (Sudama), Duryodhana and Karna, etc. Such friends become life’s greatest blessing and lifetime achievement. This proverb does not only tell the nature of a true friend but also give us way to choose good friends.

A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed Essay 5 (300 words)

It is considered as the college life becomes the happiest time of the life as we become surrounded by the good friends and enjoy a lot. Good friends live together happily and participate in the activities together. The proverb A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed indicates the quality of a true friend. In the very starting, it is hard to recognize the quality of a friend but not so tough. This proverb tells us that people who are willing to help you in the crisis time are really true ones and one of the blessings of God for you than those who just want to stay in your fun time.

A true friend always gives full support whenever we are in need. We cannot recognize that whether a friend is good or bad but during difficult times they can naturally be recognized. Every one of us generally needs a friend who can help us during bad times and not just for fun. Sometimes the condition really becomes very worst and we do not get any way to be out of that, in that case we need help from others. This is the time when we miss a friend who can give us help and take us out of the difficulty. True friends are really of much importance; whenever we become absent someday in the school, they discuss important topics and helps us with all the notes and materials done in the class.

No one can really help us like a true friend as they share all the highs and lows of the life. Thus, we learn from this proverb that it is only real friend who appears with us in all time; but those who just stay with us in happy times are not good friends. True friends always give good memories and reasons to be in friendship forever.


 

A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed Essay 6 (400 words)

A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed is a proverb which indicates about the quality of a real friend. Sometimes, the true relationship with a friend is much influential than other relationships. Real friends become lifelong friends. Friends are good or bad can be realized during the difficult time of the life. True friends always remain in close whereas cheater left away as they only want to enjoy in happy times. Whenever we get problems, we miss someone special who can take us away from problems and it can be done only by the best friend. It is not necessary that a good friend can be only from outside. A good friend can be one of the family members like mother, father, sister, brother, etc.

Good people don’t like to have crowd in their life; they have only few friends but true and trustworthy. They always maintain a true relationship in friendship and are ready to help anytime. They never judge their friends as they have quality to give not take in order to build a healthy and long lasting friendship. True friends are trustworthy, honest, loyal, empathetic, self confident, supportive, non-judgmental and most importantly a good listener.

If we earn a good friend in life, we earn the most precious thing. We can share to them anything and any secret of the life. Having a good friend is very necessary to all of us in such a hectic life so that we can release the mind pressure of study, job, business, family, etc by talking to them. A true friend may have variety of good qualities however having basic qualities are necessary to be engaged into the good friendship. We should not be hurry in making friendship in order to avoid stranger and cheater friends. We should take proper time in understanding the friends all around us and choose someone special for our friendship who may lead us ahead in life.

May be, you get true friendship very quickly, however, the relationship build over long time become long lasting and valuable. Being in true friendship for long is much harder than finding good friends. Not everyone is blessed with true friendship, only few lucky people are blessed to have this true relationship. A true friend becomes very polite (sometimes hard when required) and soft-spoken with gentle manners. He/she never show dominance in the relation and never become selfish and mean minded. True friends never get benefits of our innocence and softness. They always protect us to go at wrong path and being involved in the wrong habits.